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[serene]

Just posted to 5_word_poetry:



I wouldn't, she said,
and I didn't
mind
and she set me adrift
and she set me apart

and I wouldn't, she said,
and I didn't
listen
tell
because a word from her
a black look, a sullen gaze, her lip between her teeth
set me spinning
like some spinning thing
like some whirling person
a frenzy of arms and legs
without brakes
without pride

I wouldn't, she said,
until suddenly it clicked
until suddenly in me
there was a convergence of thoughts
a blending of ideas
and I realized that it was true

She wouldn't.
I would.
And there lay our end.
And there lay our

end.

Comments

[firecat]

Nice. I love rhythmic repetition in poetry.

[serenejournal.livejournal.com]

Thanks!